17-10-2008, 20:01
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חבר מתאריך: 11.11.06
הודעות: 97
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בדיקה מכתב באנגלית .. אשמח לביקורות . בונות
קוד:
Dear Stanley Yelants,
I am writing this letter because I want to share with you my opinion about your behavior to your classmate, Christian Wiburl, in the camp.
When you and your friend arrived to the camp in Brazil, you was should have to cope with a lot of problems. After one month you arrived the difficult trouble happened, in the night Christian ran away from the camp and he didn’t tell you to where he ran but you decided in the morning to looking for him.
In the one hand I think your behavior was very brave, because you went looking for him alone in foreign place, but on the other hand, your decision was irresponsible and dangerous because you didn’t tell anyone that Christian run away and you went to looking for him.
Therefore if I was in your shoes, first of all I was going to the manger camp and tell him the story and call the police to help us find him. I think this way is more effective and safely that your way to try solving the problem.
To the end Stanly I am sure that you want the best for your friend and you did it because you worried about him, but, if you would think some more, the result should be better.
Sincerely David .
אשמח אם תתקנו אם יש איפה לתקן ..
ואם אתה חושבים שצריך היה לכתוב אחרת ./גם אשמח לתיקונים כאלה ..
תודה רבה..
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